i remember

Gosh this essay is fun

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buckeyes

Here we go ohio state.

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It's just a phase

The essay "Once More to the Lake," is a very good example of a phase essay. I loved how it showed how one phase in his life as a little boy comes back into his life when he is an adult with his own children. However, it was kinda hard for me to relate to because I do not have any children. However, I loved the mood of the essay because it really represented the relaxed mood the lake and summer time represents. I love the interuption in the essay where the author talks about the sound of the "outboard motors." The mood instantly changes and it really represents the loud noises of the motors.

The essay "Innocence is Bliss," made me laugh. I thought it was extremely cheesy. I thought the author was trying to create a fun, relaxing mood but I thought that some of the lines were over the top and unnatural. However, I did think the author picked a good phase in her life to describe, I just think she could have done a better job portraying the mood so it wasn't quite so cheesy. For example, the line "I knew in my heart Colin and I were something special," could be omitted. 8th grade relationships just aren't that serious.

The essay "Hooked" was probably my favorite of the three. I liked this one because I thought it did the best job creating a peaceful mood. It's funny how all three essays tried to create a peacefull and carefree mood. Maybe I'll try to do a completely different mood thats more scary and intense just to be different. I loved the word "gurgling" in this essay just because it made me smile. There were a few points in this essay that made me smile which I think is really important in the way the author portrays his mood. But then at the end of the essay, the author finds out that some of his fishing stuff was stolen. I loved the complete drastic change in the mood. I felt that this was essential at keeping my attention. But then the author wraps up the essay by focusing on the positive things. Good job YZF93!

starbucks

Feeding my addiction.

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I want Spring!

please.

Rafael

Rafael Nadal is such an amazing athlete. I love to watch him play because everytime I am so inspired by this effort he puts in and his unbelievable skill level.

Math

Math is normally my favorite subject. Next year, I plan to study architecture which will heavily involve math. I am extremely strong at math yet today I am dreading 6th period more than ever. We have a quiz today over a concept that I do not understand at all. As I discuss the subject with my classmates I learn that I am one of many that do not understand it. Because of this, I wrote a letter to mr. winnebrenner.....

Dear Mr. Winnebrenner,

Please do not give the math quiz today for I will certainly fail. Have a heart.

Love,
me.

Faja

I may be ignorant and clueless or I may be asking the same question as you but what does "Faja" mean?  Is that a name or is it a word in a different language for father.  Nevertheless, it does not take away from the essay.  I was suprised at how much I liked this essay.. much more so than the other two.  I connected to it instantly because the father figure in this story is much like my father... extremely busy yet thouroughly enjoy any moment he gets to himself.  My dad during the summer spends his rarely seen free time on our front porch reading a good book and enjoying the weather much like the father in this essay.  However, on a cold winter day like today, my daddy spends his down time in front of the tv, guarding the remote from us kids, and is asleep in record time.  In fact, he is asleep in the living room next to me as the bears game is on. DA BEARS!  I also liked how in the essay the writer talks about his father's desire to take his family to the Bahamas and that's why he works so hard.  My father works extremely hard for the same reason, to provide for his family and to give his beautiful daughters what they want.  I felt the peaceful mood in the essay that I think the author was trying to portray in order to represent the peacefullness his or her father enjoys during his time on the porch.  Now that all my homework is done, I am going to join my father in a typical sunday nap.  Let's have a great week.

H-Town

I can barely contain my excitement for tonight.  Filming headlines for my Church youth group is one of my favorite parts of my week.  Tonight were doing a basketball theme and I just got an awesome sweatband to wear that says H-Town.  Paired with my colorful nikes..... Showing my school spirit.  HA.

Your life is your own.

"I am the master of my fate; I am the captain of my soul."
-William Henley

Bucket List

I am in the middle of creating my bucket list.  I suppose a bucket list is sort of cliche in a way but I am making it my goal to accomplish everything on my list.  Coming soon to blogger :]

One of My Life Goals...

One day I hope to set foot on every continent on this planet.  This is just one of the places i'd like to visit.

Rainy Mountain

My favorite part of this essay is the overall personal mood.  Because the author revolves the essay around his grandmother, the essay is easy to relate to.  I am very close to both my grandmothers and therefore this story was easy for me to relate to.  I love how the author connected his grandmother to what he was experiencing and his heritage.  He recalled lots of his memories of her and that made me feel like I had met her.  I loved when he described her "long black hair" and her appearance because it was easy to see in my head.  Visual descriptive words are something I really wanna use in my essay because they really paint a picture in the readers head.  Compared to the essay Ground Zero I did not like the ending sentence of this essay at all.  I wish he had ended the essay with a more positive statement about his grandmother instead of a negative one.  I liked the Ground Zero essay overall better than the Rainy Mountain essay because it has better description and it's easier to relate to.

Ground Zero

Suzanne Berne does a great job using description words to create a vivid image in her reader's minds.  I was suprised at how much I liked this essay to be honest.  I loved all the description words and I loved the sad and dreary overall theme.  Berne does a great job making the reader feel the mood that she had when she visited Ground Zero.  By using descriptive words such as "clutching," "absense," "emptiness," and "overcast," the author is able to express extremely accurately the mood she is experiencing in real life.  I also liked how the whole story is from her point of view.  It is much easier to connect to and to feel like your actually there compared to an essay that just states overall facts about Ground Zero.  This essay is about her real experiences and emotions.  The last line in the essay... "And by the act of our visiting - whether we are motivated by curiostiy or horror or reverence or grief, or by something confusing that combines them all - that space fills up again." really affected me.  I just really liked this sentence because it applies to the author's experience at Ground Zero and it can apply to all sorts of different situations.  The power in this sentence really sums up the rest of the essay.

its the little things that matter.

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Excited

I am a total nerd but I am so excited about this blog thing :]