The essay "Once More to the Lake," is a very good example of a phase essay. I loved how it showed how one phase in his life as a little boy comes back into his life when he is an adult with his own children. However, it was kinda hard for me to relate to because I do not have any children. However, I loved the mood of the essay because it really represented the relaxed mood the lake and summer time represents. I love the interuption in the essay where the author talks about the sound of the "outboard motors." The mood instantly changes and it really represents the loud noises of the motors.
The essay "Innocence is Bliss," made me laugh. I thought it was extremely cheesy. I thought the author was trying to create a fun, relaxing mood but I thought that some of the lines were over the top and unnatural. However, I did think the author picked a good phase in her life to describe, I just think she could have done a better job portraying the mood so it wasn't quite so cheesy. For example, the line "I knew in my heart Colin and I were something special," could be omitted. 8th grade relationships just aren't that serious.
The essay "Hooked" was probably my favorite of the three. I liked this one because I thought it did the best job creating a peaceful mood. It's funny how all three essays tried to create a peacefull and carefree mood. Maybe I'll try to do a completely different mood thats more scary and intense just to be different. I loved the word "gurgling" in this essay just because it made me smile. There were a few points in this essay that made me smile which I think is really important in the way the author portrays his mood. But then at the end of the essay, the author finds out that some of his fishing stuff was stolen. I loved the complete drastic change in the mood. I felt that this was essential at keeping my attention. But then the author wraps up the essay by focusing on the positive things. Good job YZF93!
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